Matt Bellamy

Sorry for the delay in this crit! You've had so many in-depth critiques already, I hope I can still be somewhat helpful. I really like your poem. It is lovely ...

Hello! Sorry for the delay in this critique. I think I'll look at this line by line: If this wretched obsession wasn't beating in my chest, I like this first ...

This only has one critique? This saddens me. I really enjoyed reading this, and sorry I haven't gotten around to critiquing it sooner. A couple of things, the third stanza ...

Sorry this is so late, I know you posted in my review thread ages ago and I've been neglecting my critiquing a lot lately, but here we go! Firstly, I ...

This would flow better if all the lines were roughly the same length. Also, as I've said in one of your previous poems, you use simple, obvious rhymes, again - ...

Well, wow. At first, I didn't like this girl because she sounded so pretty and perfect. But then, how you changed it around...you described it extremely well, the way you ...

It's quite cute, but the rhyming is a little obvious - eye, sky, cry, die, me, be, free, etc. You touch on some good ideas, but you touch them...and then ...

Guh, gorgeous, you people are making me so jealous today. I like the repetition here: "We’re thinking about you. We’re thinking about the December..." Also, this is a good line: ...

Yeah, this made me go "awwwww". I liked how you addressed music, writing and art to make your point. Only one thing: "there be no art -form" didn't sound quite ...

I'm not feeling it, either. Sure, you've told us how you feel, but you need to show us what it's like, maybe give an example of other couples? Because I ...

This is pretty good. I like the way you're trying to convince yourself that these people are only an inconvenience. However, I don't think it flows as well as it ...

Welcome to YWS! :) I'd like to remind you that we have a 2:1 ratio here, that is, we review two pieces of work by someone else before posting one ...

Hello, welcome to YWS! :) I'd like to remind you that here we operate a 2:1 ratio, that is, for every piece of writing we post, we first critique two ...

Great, you've made me jealous of how you write, are you happy now? :P I just love your tone, it sounds so good. I like how you swapped red and ...

I really like this. Your description, if slightly overused, is good. A couple of things: You introduce the character's name halfway through the poem, and this threw me a little. ...